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Welcome to the thon, I hope you're enjoying the deplorable summer heat so far. Since you've asked for crit, I'll go over it with a bit more detail. I like your use of personification throughout most of the pieces. However, many are wordy with adjectives that don't really help e...


A good start, I like the image - using dawn in your opening piece as well as "sweeping clean", suggesting to start on a clean slate. Here are two suggestions: 1) "sun rays" sounds odd to me without the possessive noun, perhaps say "sun's rays" 2) the distribution of the words among lines (a...

Pikachu, use STAR ATTACK! :star:

It's Super effective; author is butthurt. :V

disclaimer: not all crits ended in butthurt

Are you joining the July Summer Haikuthon?

58%
52 deviants said Hell yeah! (comment so I can see your names)
42%
37 deviants said Hell no! (you're part weak, part pussy: a wussy)

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That's starting with a bang

Journal Entry: Wed Jul 1, 2009, 12:59 AM
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Hear lit tweet here :bulletblue: DA News :bulletblue: Lit-twitter's page

The 1st of July is where it all happens


Many cool things are happening today, among them the July Summer Haikuthon for poets and the Flash Fiction month for prosers. With all this happening, it was a pleasant surprise to get a DD on my fantasy/crime noir/fiction piece "The meat came home". In fact it comes as a total surprise, since I haven't written any fiction since "Me, She and Bee", way back last year. This pony has one trick more than just 6 word stories.

A big thank you to `poprocksandcharlotte and ^fllnthblnk.

Also, thank you to all of you folk who've faved and/or watched me, or just plain enjoyed the story.

Pimp corner


Since you're here, do go over this obligatory pimpage:

:bulletblue: :iconlit-twitter: my pet project for spreading DA literature news through twitter.

As I've mentioned earlier, this July there's:

:bulletblue: The July Summer Haikuthon for those interested in Japanese form poems. It even has several stamps:

and

:bulletblue: Flash Fiction month for those more interested in short prose.

:bulletred: I want to bring attention to the fact there's more to haiku than its 5-7-5 form, as demonstrated in this stamp:



That said, I don't want to be misconstrued as saying 5-7-5 is not correct, just that not having 5-7-5 form is also perfectly fine. Surprisingly, both sides aren't wrong. Shocker!

:bulletred: Another issue I feel is important, an anti-search option for literature so writers can post stuff on DA, improve it (cynics, stop laughing) and still be able to get it published later without running into first-rights issues.



:pointr: More information on both the stamps, so be sure to check/fav/feature the stamps.

Thanks for your attention. :)

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My name is Qishin and I've been on DA for almost three years. I live in Sunny Malaysia, so feel free to ask me about weird exotic things I have no idea about. Bear with my terrible sense of humor and bluntness, and we'll get along swimmingly. It would also help if you learned to Sarcasm.

On DA, I'm most active within the prose and Eastern poetry community. I also run the nosy Lit-Twitter project. So even if I seem quiet, I've probably got an eye on you.

Off from DA, you can find me on Last.fm and Twitter

Comments


Hmmm, when folk make a stunning suggestion, and I make the change. Is that, you know, allowed. (Or should I wait until August?)

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People are Important - Goals much less
When we stop learning we have begun to die - Shamelessly Purloined
Nope, change right away if it works for you. You can leave the original version in the artist's comments section.

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“Now me lay down to sleep.
Mow da zeebas down like sheep.
Give dem to me nice and dead.
Me no happy ‘til me fed.”
-Bedtime prayer of crocs, Pearls Before Swine
Thanks for your prompt reply :star:

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People are Important - Goals much less
When we stop learning we have begun to die - Shamelessly Purloined
Thanks a lot for the critiques :hug:
I need to get rid of my too many adjectives and to not tell what's obvious ^^

It will help me a lot in future :)

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There are no bored people only lazy people
:spank: :spank: :spank: me please :lick:

A BIG THANK TO =psivamp for the cute avatar she made me :grope:

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